RPC Authority

I loved how you integrated the myth of the Grand Deluge and came up with a very refreshing take on the rebirthing theme. Good job on this entry, and even thought it wasn't the winner I am quite pleased with how it turned out.

I love stuff about the Deluge as a real, historical event, but I think this article does too much telling and not enough showing.

Deluge birb! Poggers stuff.

Wonderful article, I hope to see connected works possibly in the future.

Some very interesting ideas here, unfortunately mixed with many that I cannot honestly accept. An object this transparently destructive and significant takes more work to sell than what's here. The article could've been much improved by having more ambiguity and letting sparse given details paint a picture for the reader.

The precise details of the first addendum are what push the article from being questionable in canon to being absurd regardless. The existence of "numerous technologically advanced civilizations approximately 10,000 years ago" is more than enough for an article by itself, and glossing over it indicates that this story was not ready to leave the drawing board.

A camera having been manufactured 10,000 years ago does not sound any more credible when one calls it a "camera-like device"… 2/5

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As other comments have said, this article suffers from severe hand-holding syndrome. There are however other issues too. For example, multiple hiccups in tone, such as too weak of a clinical tone in the description, and too strong of one in the end of the interview.

The containment protocols are way too short for an anomaly of this class. Usually doesn't matter much, but first impressions are important for setting the tone.

The dialogue is not very good and doesn't feel natural. A bit too static and flat.

The concept is fascinating though, just needs more brainstorming and fine-polishing.

2/5