this article is great, and im still giving it a 5, but would it be possible to get a more realistic image for the camera footage at the end?
having it be a drawing just sucks all the immersion down the drain
this article is great, and im still giving it a 5, but would it be possible to get a more realistic image for the camera footage at the end?
having it be a drawing just sucks all the immersion down the drain
Thanks for the rating, I'll do what I can about the images.
Wow, I wasn't expecting the images. I like the way you've shown them. Though I personally am a fan of drawings, if used correctly, but that's just me.
Nice work man
Overall, I like this. It's a classic body horror article, executed pretty nicely. However, the first couple paragraphs of the description are a bit confusing, and do not specify whether this is a group of RPC-179 instances or a singular organism. I'd also lose the second image, as it's a drawing, and you shouldn't use a drawing when it's footage of the RPC. +4 right now, could move to a +5 if these errors are fixed.
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I like this article, and feel free to take my criticism with a grain of salt since I am new here. I gave it a +4, but it definitely has plenty of room to expand. For example, I like the idea of a varied intelligence between the instances, but are the entities of a similar orientation. Do they only have the goal to expand, and infect others. How exactly does the -3 instance show it's intelligence. Are the different brains all active within the entity allowing for multiple layers of thought. I think just by expanding on some the ideas you had in your piece this would be a +5 easy.
Thanks for the rating! I plan on expanding on this article with interview logs and more addendums.
The drawings hold the RPC back due to the breaking of immersion. Still good though, but 4/5 unless changed. If anything at least get rid of the the recording overlay on the second one. I honestly thought this was a J when I saw that.
I'm sorry you feel that way. I've removed the second image.
I've made a new image for the article. Is it good or bad? Should I change it again? Thanks to all who have given feedback.
I like the first image on the original article, and I like the new one. For the most part, with body horror articles, I feel like high quality images add a lot. One of the things for me that made the original one great was the purple color. I love the purple as it reminds me of old horror movies, and in nature it really stands out as unnatural.
I suppose my main issue would be that most of my crit for the draft of this article seems to still stand, with the exception of narrative direction (which I suppose you made a conscious choice to leave out in order to keep this article simple).
It kind feels like just another mind-control monster, which doesn't even have to be mind-controlled. We are told about 179 in action, but never seem to actually see it in action. We are teased about 179 instances but don't actually see them.
2 now. Don't let this discourage you, the others seem to really like this.