http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/forum/t-14140355/rpcs-discovered-by-sr-researcher-adelric-randoma#post-5029416
Thank you KingWillPower for helping me with the tone of this document, and thank you to those for the helpful crits.
A suggested change
All previous Containment Protocols for RPC-941-1 have proved unsuccessful. Every attempt to contain RPC-941-1 ends up with it driving through the containment walls or fencing taking no visible damage. Previous containment attempts have been detailed below:
- RPC-941-1 is contained in a 20m x 30m electrified fence topped with Barbed wire across the top.
- RPC-941-1 is contained in a 20m x 30m concrete fencing with a reinforced steel gate.
- RPC-941-1 is to be contained in the sub-basement of Site-092 with concrete, ██████████, and an armed squad of ASF Personnel surrounding it at all times
RPC-941 instances have many different usual or unusual flavors. While some will remain consistent with its described flavor, outliers exist which produce flavors that will have a physical or mental reaction to the human body once consumed.
Should be in the description.
5/5 overall
5/5 premise. Unique enough, based in reality enough, develops further through the article.
5/5 delivery. Good tone. Got a laugh, found it interesting, and good horror.
5/5 grammar. Read easily and quickly.
Loved it.
4/5 overall stars.
Echoing from site members from above: RPC-941 is a rather good read, does not show any repetitive unnecessary wording, and has indeed good tone.
Other than that, RPC-941-1 should perhaps be another RPC object of its own, if that is the case, since RPC-941 is created from inside RPC-941-1.
RPC-941 "instances" of varying flavor should be under the collective instanceship labelled to as an RPC-941-[n] instead.
Anyways, no issue in it.
O/