Site-019
Site-019 is on the Moon.
This is a very competent rewrite with excellent clinical tone and scientific basis. I enjoyed most of the article — with the exception of that final interview. MacIntyre acts astoundingly, incredibly retarded and it is insane that nobody stopped him from provoking a hostile entity out of his own volition. I don't think it's entirely, 100% unreasonable that they'd threaten her subjects but doing like this is stupid. MacIntyre knows at the very least that 005 can wipe the floor with him and half the Site if she wants to, and she's broken containment before, so he's risking his own life for a move that might only make her completely shut down in the best case scenario.
This would've made more sense if, failing to make any headway, unable to make serious diplomatic advance, and further unable to fabricate diplomatic documents, they tried out some kind of risky good-bad cop routine where the bad cop threatened to block any diplomatic efforts unless she cooperated more. Right now it just makes MacIntyre specifically look braindead.
Additionally, I'm not entirely sold on 005 as a character. When I first read the article, I expected the final interview to build on her earlier breakdown to show a different facet of her character, but instead it just goes for the containment breach. She comes off as one-dimensional in her wishes for her people and contempt toward westerners, the exact kind of character you immediately picture when told "protector god of the X people". That bit of breakdown and the implication that she's not a "natural" god is a very interesting setup that does not pay off. I'd edit that last interview to make it longer, introduce some nuances in how she thinks and faces her duty and current state beyond "must protect my people". Like — what if her superiority complex is a façade she uses because she can't cope with the extreme burden of her duty but cannot reject it either?
Additionally not sold on the hyper-intelligence aspect. She does not come off as particularly intelligent (not that there's much room for that to happen — but again, this could've been setup for a twist in the final interview, like maybe her entire emotional range is her just probing the Authority and seeing how they react rather than a genuine response) and it does not aid her character either. If anything, a lack of maturity feels like the obvious missing piece to make her a flawed, interesting character.
+4 — it's good, but that last interview sours it for me. I'm also not sure what's the point of the hidden collapsible being hidden.