Wow, what a fantastic article!! So much fun to read. I have a few comments but I think this is a HUGE addition to RPC lore- reminds me of the Space Trilogy by CS Lewis and the Silmarrion… Simlarrilon… the book by Tolkien with the straight road and stuff.
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The images
are really good- I wasn't sure about the entropy doodle earlier but I think it's a good addition to give a visual aide that isn't super complicated. I feel like if it was more detailed a la some SCP images that have all the headings and bloated diagrams, I wouldn't want it there. It makes me think of something a teacher would put on a screen for a class on this subject- if you ever do change the image, I would make edit it to look like something on a chalkboard, since the sketch already looks like the ones u see in movies.
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I commented on this in the forums, but I don't like the amount of redactions. As an example, I made a similar mistake in 619, which didn't actually describe the affects of the anomaly on the airships it was targeting (funnily enough, also in Britain). I don't think I really fixed it, but what I'm trying to get at is that yes, you should let the reader make their own conclusions and stuff, but all you say here (ultimately) is that it caused deaths, panic, and some people got changed by the fog. Since the fog is of decreased cohesion, and it seems to just disintegrate or absorb what comes into it, it sounds more like it just turned people into fog ghosts or whatever instead of something more cool. Reduce the redactions and try to steer the train of thought towards your own idea of what the fog does.
In the wake of the 1952 London smog incident, numerous European agencies, allocated substantial resources to investigate the Elysian plane.
Remove the second comma and mention whether they were working together or separately on this issue- did MI13 collaborate?
Xian Dao (仙島)
I have a similar feeling with all of the otherworlds listed, but I think this one in particular is a good example of an otherworld that needs more otherlore. It's good to keep it brief, but there's a lot of time here that isn't covered- we hear of how they would intervene in times of tumult in China, but not how they would intervene or really interact in general until PCAAO tried to invade (which is an interesting idea). Compare that to:
Al-Alam Al-Ghayb (العالم الغيب)
This one is perfect and should be an example of how the other-otherworlds should look on this page. Perfect summary, it's brief, and it leaves a lot of room for other writers to come up with their own ideas. I'm not sure if it speaks more to how good the concept is or how well its written down, but I think structuring the description of other worlds like Al-Alam would be a good change.
This plane served as a nexus point for nearby artificial otherworlds in the Euphrates. Due to its strategic location along the Silk Road, it became a favored shortcut for numerous merchants and Muslim pilgrims, guided by thaumaturgists who could discern the geocentric shift in the stars.
that's so cool im gonna die
Even if you decide not to make these changes (I would rather you spend your time writing more stuff for this idea than fixing nitpicks) this is still an easy 5 🩵 thank you for your time and effort !!!! you are so creative and this is so so cool
Raggabrash - crit
MF_TOMB - crit
Almarduk - crit
televisionist - crit
Superspambot - addition for the spirit realm