RPC Authority

So three things that stuck out to me, one is that you used Amnestics, and prior to that you used the Extergito Glyphs. I would fix that. You also mentioned the containment protocols being updated, but there's no example of this, in the text. I'd recommend making the update to containment protocols more obvious, by adding some previous protocols that have been struck through. Like this.

The third thing that felt out of place, was 'The Lead Researcher' which sounds weirder than say 'Lead Researcher Yates' Since RPC's being studied typically have a single lead researcher. I would also have included the dream about being a member of the Board. Or just have it mentioned as [Redacted] or blackboxed in the dream logs.

Why is this not a lesser anomalous item? Being useful does not really make it an rpc imo.

This could have done better with a research tests log, it's still salvageable by the use of an interesting item with not too overly complicated anomalous effects. I thibk it would be better if instead of the cliché of glowing it would alter the perception exposed subjects have about their surroundings, kind of like perceiving their environment as foggy or as if it was dreamlike, y'know what I'm saying? :dabs:just my two cents for this piece. 4 stars.

I gave it a three, it's too little of a surprise it's just too simple, and needs more substance, more meat even though you have the spices, the idea is not bad you just really need to expand on it.
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I love the concept, really do, feels like a mix of Inception and those theories about people astral projecting to enter places like the Pentagon or whatever.

However, it’s all over the place: abysmal addendum, it was just so boring, nobody wants to read a list of Le Happenings that tell us how dangerous the RPC can be, we already figured it out. Tone is meh and honestly I feel like it just doesn’t go anywhere. Has potential though so maybe not all hope is lost.

The article is poor as it does not do anything beyond describing a dream catcher that makes you remember your dreams and has the details therein be at times consistent with what is true in the actual world. The test logs in their entirety could be deleted as they serve nothing but maybe being a place for two crosslinks.