RPC Authority

this article is perfect and i have re-rated it accordingly

amazing job

Many thanks to the following users for their criticism on the forum:
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Article picture was drawn by me.

Edit, 12/31/18: Goddamit. the star bar went transparent and I idly clicked around it. I really did not want to rate my own article, but there's no way to take it back. Silly point of pride, but what a dumb move.

This fits the vision of the RCP Authority perfectly and is exactly the kind of thing I envisioned when I first proposed the "league of heroes" Group of Interest those months ago. This was very much worth the wait. RPC-068 deserves all five of the stars I gave it. I thoroughly enjoyed it when it was first posted and I still enjoy it as much now.

I just love how human this article is. Not like any other articles that try to be professional. I also love how the RPC/RCP also contributes to her own article in a way. Would love to see similar styles.

My only criticism would be that the "discovery" comes before the description. Quite unorthodox, and it doesn't have any reason to be so. The article works well without such a change.

Other than that and a few grammatical mistakes, this gets a "4" now. I'll return on the 15th to cast my vote and hopefully, I can get myself to vote "5".

I love this interpretation of the Authority- professional, and careful, but also caring. I appreciate that we haven't, at large, gone the route of pretending to care about humanity while killing people by the masses. This is an organization I'd actually be happy to be a part of. 5* from me.

I like this rpc mostly because of the interview logs with Researcher Sharon and because it reminds me of Fahrenheit 451. So +5,however there is one problem with it and its that you put 070 on Researcher Budylin's note when you should of put 068.

This may have actually been my favourite thing on the site yet. Seriously, this got a 5 star even half way through.

One thing, that I think may be a typo:

The ambush was swift, cutting down the Hredcloaks around the truck with a burst of machine gun fire.

Should that be "redcloaks"? Or is "Hredcloaks" intentional? Either way, that is the only mild issue I had.

5 stars, you should be damn fucking proud of this.

FUCKIN' AMAZING
+5

This article is really good. The anomaly’s concept is interesting, the world building is pretty good for the limited format, and overall the article is extremely solid.

But it does have its share of issues. The portrayal of the RCPA as these “bad guys” was way too on the nose, and could’ve been done more subtly. Bookburning is the classic “bad guy” act, so you didn’t also have to mention how they “demonized Justice” and all of that, because it ended up just explaining the obvious.
In addition, while I can somewhat understand the RCPA using “Justice” all the time (I still think it’s too on the nose), I don’t understand why the dissenters do, too. Having more creative insults leading to more horrific results (for example, calling them pigs would turn the author into a pig, or the author is crushed by a stampede), would help the article a lot.
Finally, I think the dialogue was very awkward at times, with random linebreaks and sentences that felt just /off/. I can’t really elaborate without pointing out specifics.

Despite all that, it’s still an entertaining read and was fairly creative. +4.